Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

Music, art

as well as

drama are equally significant as other academic subjects are, specifically in elementary schools.

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essay agrees with the statement as recreational subjects not only enhance the creativity of a

child

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but

also

helps

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them to become physically fit. The primary reason why these topics are grandiose is

because

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it

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assist

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the student

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student

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to become more creative. These activities create pressure on a

child

’s

mind

and they become curious to understand the piece placed in front of their eyes.

Moreover

, these recreational topics do not put any kind of burden on a pupil’s

mind

because of which they feel relaxed and lay more

efforts

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in

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music, drama and art,

as a result

, some kids try to make

such

master pieces

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that

the

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can flaunt the message easily.

For example

, In India, schools are offering more options in

such

subjects to sharpen the

mind

of a

child

.

Therefore

, the number of little stars is increasing in the country. To add

further

credence, health is a priority for every person, which should be taken care

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one.

Such

activities aid tiny totes to become active and do more work out because of which a

child

will not face any problem of obesity, which give birth

too

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many diseases like heart attack and thyroid. In

such

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situation

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if a

child

expose

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himself or herself to

do

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some actions they can be healthy and get more presence of

mind

.

For instance

, in japan the number of

child

sickness

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is less as

Japanese

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indulge their kids in drama and to fulfil

the

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needs of it they learn sports.

To conclude

, I believe that

this

pastime is an appropriate way to

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healthy habits of being fit and to sharpen the

mind

of their pupil.