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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram illustrates the changes which took place in the
city
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 of Nelson over a decade.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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,
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 the number of facilities introduced to the area has increased significantly throughout the years. In 2000, the highway separates the
city
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 into two
part
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.
On
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 the west of the
city
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 centre, some old markets are located.
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, on the
north-west
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northwest
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 of the map , a train
station
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 is situated , which is close to the
university
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.
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, the
university
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 is located on the
northest
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northeast
, next to the forest.
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,
in
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today , old markets
has
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have
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 been demolished and replaced by a new shop , which is situated
on
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in
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 the west of the
city
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 centre.
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, in the North-East of the
city
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 centre, the forestation had been replaced by an innovative shopping mall.
Also
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 , the
olf
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old
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 train
station
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 turned into an up-to-the-date
station
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, which is linked to the
university
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 by a
trainline
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train line
.
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, to the North- West of the train
station
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, a dormitory has been built in an open area next to the
university
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.
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, down
of
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the highway, a restaurant, bars and clubs have been introduced recently. It is significant to mention that the highway turned into a pedestrian walk.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, station, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • land use
  • residential
  • commercial
  • green spaces
  • public transport
  • urbanization
  • de-urbanization
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • industrial
  • transformation
  • recent times
  • comparisons
  • notable
  • key features
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