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people use things in a short time then throw them away. What are its causes and what are its problems? What could be done to address this issue?

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people use things in a short time
then
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and then
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 throw them away which
cause
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causes
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misuse
. when
misuse
 becomes more in
this
 world that will become earth's problem. that will be a health issue. the solution
of
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to
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misuse
 we can reduce
such
 as do not buy anything
that is
 not nessecesary, buying only things that you need. we can reduce the
misuse
 by burning them and making it to become like aspal, we can make asphalt from the
misuse
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