The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.
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The table depicts the percentage of students joining
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school from 2000 to 2009, which are categorized into four groups. In brief, all of the attendance had
downward
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a downward
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tendency,
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only the presence in community schools had
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upward trend. In detail, people who come to specialist academies were 12% in 2000,
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started to dip continuously until the
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period to 10%, which indicated the lowest number in 2009. Grammar schools
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experienced a similar pattern to that of the specialist educational institutions, which plunged moderately from 24% to 19% in 2005
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and continued to decline in 2009.
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, voluntary-controlled departments, which was the most famous school in 2000,
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experienced to drop gradually to 20% in the
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year.
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, community departments had the slightest number in the first year. Surprisingly, the number of people who came to
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educational institutions rose sharply from 12% to 32%, and
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trend had long-term popularity, which showed more than half population entered the academy in 2009.
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