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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recyclng is for the goverment to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

#people #waste #homes #recyclng #goverment #requirement #laws
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In
contemporary
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world
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 we are living in the technological era.
Recycle
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 is supposed to be a crucial topic discussed by many and some
people
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 reckon that the governments should increase legal
requirement
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,
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 not enough of the
waste
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 from homes
is
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 recycled today. Undoubtedly, A lot of garbage
are
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is
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 not recycled now and it is carrying on a harmful impact on our environment
and
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people
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 should pay more money for not recyclable
staffs
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. If
people
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 had to pay more money for the amount of not recyclable
waste
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throw
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, they will try to reduce as much as they can.
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, A lot of countries
has
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 environmental problems in Africa. They have garbage pollution there. Citizens could not go
to swim
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, because there are a lot of garbage.
Additionaly
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,
people
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 can`t acquire to drink
water
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 from
river
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the river
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, because there
are
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water
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 pollution and there are locals
have
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a
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stomachaches
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. Because
,
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water
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 pollution has a harmful influence on health.
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, it can be seen, that where
people
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 can drink
from
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water
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 and
there
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people
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 have only recyclable
waste
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.
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, some countries have increased their taxes on not recyclable
waste
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.
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, The
Netherland`s
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 government
had
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increased their taxes on not recyclable purchases.
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, the locals
has
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 stopped to acquire not recyclable
merchandises
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merchandise
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. Currently, all Netherlands firms have bankruptcy which produced not recyclable merchandise.
To sum up
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, I firmly believe that we
need
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 recycle tax, which will have a tremendous impact on
frims
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firms
 which do not produce recyclable products.
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, we will have immense problems with our
enviroments
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environment
environments
.
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