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Write about the following topic. Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#topic #people #students #ability
Every
student
 has own interested area, sometimes institute cannot grade and evaluate them fairly in regular terms. Someone may think that every
student
 should follow the same pattern of academic pathway because it will help classify the
intelligent
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 level of
students
.
While
 others suggest that it is more appropriate to
devide
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divide
decide
 courses
according to
 the ability of
students
. The following paragraphs will be pointed out
about
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these
both
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apply
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point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, people tend to use regular or standard lessons to classify
the
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students
 by their knowledge or IQ. From my point of view,
this
 method cannot bring all potential of
students
 because some
students
 tend to do art which is not evaluated in the standard class.
Students
 might find their own special skills that are not in the academic term.
Therefore
, the children cannot show and illustrate their potential as
such
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much
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 as possible.
On the other hand
, I totally agree with
this
 point of view which is that we should recognize and isolate the courses
according to
student's
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students'
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 skills.
This
 will boost the potential for every
student
 to find their own field of interest and maximize the possibility of success in every individual life. From my
experiences
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experience
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, one of my friends will be better
if
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off if
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 he could stay in
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a specialty
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specialty
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speciality
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 cuisines school which is only focusing
in
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on
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 Thai traditional food. After joining Suan Dusit School in Thai traditional food course, he is one of the
successful
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 people in my life by achieving his own Thai cuisine
restuarant
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restaurant
 in
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the center
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center
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centre
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 of
capital
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the capital
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citiy
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city
cities
. In conclusion, I totally support the latter idea
due to
many
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benifits
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benefits
 as I mentioned before. I confidently believe that everyone will find their dream if they are in the right place
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