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With growing populations in cities, more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there are massive developments for new residences in my city where their homes are sold for simply just having a tiny backyard or no space at all. Admittedly,
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 phenomenon is rather positive in terms of building a simple life. On one hand, a home with a huge outdoor space can completely make the house more lovely and can be a peaceful and calm place with much zen energy in it. For big families, spending most of the time outside can really bring warm connections between them.
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 can nurture their plants and make the space even prettier so they can organize an outdoor family gathering once a month.
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, with the current circumstances that the inflation
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 going higher each year and the price of land rising significantly, having a tiny backyard or none of it will not become a crucial thing. Most parents at the moment are both working to support their families, so they spend a little time at home, or maybe they just chill at their place on the weekends. These types of families prefer choosing a house
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 easier to maintain and clean since they only have a short time and a little money left. In conclusion, depending on the current situation in cities, the lack of a backyard will not be a bigger problem for today’s societies. Investing in high-quality beds or sofas will be a popular and happening choice in today’s societies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • social interaction
  • community bonding
  • mental well-being
  • urban biodiversity
  • urban heat island effect
  • energy-efficient
  • affordable housing
  • cramped living conditions
  • innovative architecture
  • interior design
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • quality of life
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