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the graph below shows the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001

the graph below shows the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001
The bar chart compares the number of
hours
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 every teacher used for teaching in three different colleges in
Japan
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,Spain, Iceland, and the
USA
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 in the year 2001.
It is clear that
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 educators in the
USA
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 devoted most of their time teaching in all institutions and
also
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 records the widest gap between the three figures. Teachers' time in upper-secondary is always higher than other academies'. The number of
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 US teachers spent teaching in high school is much higher than that in
Japan
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,which is nearly 1200
hours
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 and 700
hours
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 respectively.
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, teachers in the
USA
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 nearly spent double their time teaching in secondary school in comparison with that in
Japan
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, at 1000 and 600
hours
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. The figures for Iceland and Spain are equal, at about 900
hours
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, but the
hours
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 in the lower secondary in the former are lower than in the latter, at about 600 and 700
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. The number of
hours
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 in
Japan
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 spent in primary school is roughly 600
hours
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, compared to 625
hours
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 in Spain. The lowest figure in
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 academy is found in Iceland, with only 575
hours
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while
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 the opposite is true for the
USA
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, at 725
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, japan, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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