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Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Essay There are various different
opinions
 on the subject of the
media
. Some
people
 believe that the
media
 have to
right
 to publish
detail
 of
people
's
views
,
while
 others argue that it should be limited. In
this
 following essay, I briefly discuss both
views
 and give my own opinion. On the one hand, in
this
 modern era, more and more
people
 tend to show
people
's wrong and
right
opinions
. Some of them believe that it has negatively affected our lives and society.
Moreover
, publishing human behaviour is the most popular activity in the world.
On the other hand
, despite
such
 grave
opinions
, there are some serious negative
views
 of
this
 development. Most
people
 suggest that the
media
 and publishing should be controlled.
For instance
, serious crimes or
detail
 of criminal
people
's thoughts should not show to
children
. Because they influence the intellectual and social development of
children
.
Therefore
, parents are scared about their
children
's future. They might be criminals after knowing the methods of crime. The information from TV programs or newspapers teaches
children
 about criminal nature. In my opinion, the
media
 have to
right
 to show the
detail
 of individuals'
views
. Because I personally believe that after being aware of the consequences of committing crimes
children
 and others may come back from them.
To conclude
, I once reiterate my position that some
people
 think that the
media
 have to
right
 to publish
detail
 of human
opinions
,
while
 others argue that it should be limited. I personally believe that publishing should be direct. Because it is beneficial for
children
's future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • habitat
  • extinction
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable
  • conservation
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