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Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is irrefutable fact that these days more and more
people
 plants and
animals
 are disappearing .
After
this
 phenomenon, the majority of
people
 say that
this
 event causes environmental issues.
While
 other
people
 think that
this
 event has another crucial environmental problem.
This
 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. First of all, nowadays
people
 have a necessity for new spaces.
This
 is the
reason
,they are cutting down a
lot
 of forests.
For instance
, giving a report by the government of our country that 50 per cent of forests were cut down.
Moreover
, a vast amount of androgens hunt
animals
. They hunt these
animals
 for their financial resources and other things.
After
this
 phenomenon,rare animal species extinct.
On the other hand
,
people
's view that environmental
problems
 main reasons are increasing
such
 as greenhouses gases and using a
lot
 of vehicles.
This
 thing is an important
reason
 for them . Because greenhouses and cars fuels produce harmful gases for the
environment
.Despite
this
 , there is another main
reason
 for the
environment
's bad condition. It is using a
lot
 of plastic things . As plastic bottles, and dishes are harmful to the
environment
.
This
 is the
reason
, these days we have a
lot
 of environmental issues. In my opinion, using a
lot
 of vehicles and greenhouses plastic things is really harmful to environmental
problems
.Because they produce harmful gases . And
this
 brings us to the problem of the
environment
.
Also
,it can negatively affect
people
's health. By way of conclusion, at
this
 time some
people
 say that the main
reason
 for environmental
problems
 is the Loss of particular species of plants and
animals
. Yet, others suggest that there are more important environmental
problems
. In my view, the disappearance of plants and
animals
 is not an important thing but rather a crucial cause.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • habitat
  • extinction
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable
  • conservation
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