graph illustrates a comparison between the closure of shops and opening of new shops from 2011 to 2018.

graph illustrates a comparison between the closure of shops and opening of new shops from 2011 to 2018.
This
graph illustrates a comparison between the closure of
shops
and the opening of new
shops
from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, there are multiple variations but, the most prominent feature is the reduction in the openings and closing down of new
shops
in 2015.
Furthermore
, in 2014 the number of businesses shutting down and opening
were
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almost similar to each other.  In 2011, the closure of multiple businesses
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more than 6,000 but had a gradual reduction by the next year. It peaked at 7,000 in 2013.
However
, less than 1,000
shops
suspended their business which stood as the greatest decline seen over eight years. But, the trends were sharply rising until
it
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levelled off in 2018. The new openings had a steep drop from 2011 to 2012, when the number of openings was higher than 9,000 and 4,000, respectively. From 2015 to 2017, the trends
finally
levelled off and took a minor decline in 2018.
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