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Speaking in a foreign language in a region where you live can cause serious social and practical problems. This essay will discuss why do foreign dialect cannot be useful and why it can raise significant problems.

A verbal communication barrier may result in various issues for nationals. The locals don't feel harmony with a speaker who uses another tongue. I will discuss what
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the major concerns of using a different mode of speaking communication
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 what steps could be taken to cope with the issue. To commence, the nationals often feel disconnected from non-native speakers. They often misunderstand another mother tongue and
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 can't catch the emotions of the other person. As they are unable to extract the exact essence of the speech so they feel disconnected and
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 may avoid contacting the local
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 ultimately weakens the bond and the relationship with him.
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 year, in my
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 a Bengali native got hired. As he used to talk in Bengali mostly
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 the other workers
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 talking to him and in return he became isolated. In order to overcome the said barriers, the government should introduce various subjects in universities and other educational institutions. They can motivate students to opt for the subject by taking several essential steps
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 as spreading awareness of the learning benefits of different tongues, setting a skill set mandatory for a government job, etc. I will give here the example of
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 where the future business has been taken over by the Chinese
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 order to maintain a level of harmony with the Chinese
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 the authorities have introduced Chinese in schools
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 is playing a major role in syncing the locals with a national
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 China.
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, speaking communication in non-familiar
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 has some adverse effects. It may destroy the relationship within a community. But the authorities can overcome
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 overwhelming situation by introducing different non-local
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 in the schools and the colleges.

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State your main point in the first paragraph and keep a clear line of thought. Build 2-3 strong ideas and show how they link to the prompt. Use simple examples and explain why they matter.
coherence
Make the order of ideas clear. Start with a topic sentence for each paragraph. Use linking words (first, also, then, but, therefore) to show how ideas go together.
strength
There is a real life example that supports your idea.
structure
The essay has an intro, body and conclusion, and uses linking phrases.
cohesion
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Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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