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Some people say that no one should do the same job forever ,while other believe that doing the same job is a beneficial for the individuals, company company and Society .discuss the both view and give your opinion.

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In today's perpetually transforming epoch. career is essential for a bright future and good well-being. Few masses opine that no
one
 should have the same job for their whole growth.
Whereas
, some proclaim that it is positive for them who work they who live in
one
 team. I will discuss the boat view in the forthcoming paragraph. To commence with the former side of
this
 phenomenon, the first and foremost is people can learn new things and have a good opportunity to brief a good pay.
In addition
, Many individuals are filling boring by doing the same task the whole time. They only learn that particular thing which they do in the production and
due to
this
, they cannot able to do
job
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 for the whole life activity.
As a consequence
, Maine Pipal R changes the workplace.
Moreover
, by migrating from
one
 post to another appointment, they can learn new things about other cultures and
also
 have the opportunity to earn money.
For example
,
one
 person migrates from their workplace. So, they not only learn new facts about the association but
also
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 able to struggle without any boringness. Now, taking into account
to
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the second set of
this
 Trend,
firstly
, sticking to
one
 appointment have many positive consequences.
In other words
, individuals can able to
performance
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 without any changes in their life. There does work in
company
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a company
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 for
whole
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 time and
due to
this
, company mein bhi give them tension as a gift and
also
 have a good reputation in front of other.
For instance
,
according to
 Indian authorities, most
the
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people are getting pensions through government companies who stick with them and 8 them for their whole time.
Therefore
, sticking in
one
 place for
activity
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have
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a
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many positive effects on individuals. In conclusion, Master can learn new and feel happy by migrating
other
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company
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.
Whereas
,
take
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 on
one
 community has many positive effects
such
 as
good
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 reputation in front of them and good pay after the job.
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