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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In modern life,
population
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 will not read
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books
 or be aware of
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through
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 the papers because technology has been developed and provides
community
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 to read a wide range of
books
 and information
in
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on
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 their phones online
by
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 free. In my
opinion
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 I completely believe that it will take place in the next few decades.Each method could have pros and cons and I will state my view in
this
 essay. On the one hand, nowadays people tend to use everything through technology
which
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reading
books
 includes
this
 item and doing many things in virtual space is more comfortable and common than doing that in real space,
For example
; there is a person who is not able to buy some
books
 or information it is because of some reason which he has not enough money to provide them or those
books
,data might are not
access
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 on that area.
furthermore
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 it
is benefits
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 a nation to provide those data Without looking forward
them
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 and can easily find them
freely
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 to use or read.
On the other hand
,
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 social
applications
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 the number of readers among young people have been decreased and they tend to be more active or
be
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aware of information and news through social networks
instead
 of newspapers or
books
,
Thus
, it is a disadvantage that makes society be far from
books
 and papers by technology so it leads to less printing
books
 rather than the past by writers. In
conclusion
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 reading
books
 through the phone online
by
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 free will be more common than
the
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 past in the next few years and the number of
books
 and newspapers’ readers will become almost zero
which
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,
it
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 can have some impact on people’s health in terms of weakening the easy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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