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People are surrounded by advertising, which has an increasing effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effects of this outweigh the negative effects?

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Today, there are many
advertisements
 around us, we can see them anywhere,
for example
, there are many wonderful
advertisements
 in various media, and when we use phones or computers, we could see them almost every day. It has a huge impact on our lives. I agree that corporate advertising has a positive effect on our
life
.
Due to
 the increase in commercials, we could quickly learn a lot of product information. When we want to buy some new things, we can easily compare the different commodities and choose the best suitable one for us. Meanwhile, advertising is an important source of entertainment for many people, as time goes by, commercials are now more and more like TV dramas, with simple plots and characters. So many posters are interesting and creative, they can easily attract the public and increase the fun of our activity.
On the other hand
,
advertisements
 may have some disadvantages for our
life
.
First,
advertisements
 can make products more attractive, and they may encourage people to follow the latest trends.
This
 may lead people to buy products that are useless and waste money.
Second,
since most of the
advertisements
 are endorsed by celebrities, it has the potential to create false advertising. It could harm the interest of consumers and the reputation of the company. In my opinion, advertising can bring convenience to our
life
 and can contribute to the economy. It is beneficial to our daily
life
, but we should not ignore the negative effects on our lives.
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