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As major cities around the world are growing, so are their problems

Many countries are changing for the better day by day,
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 economy and monopoly are developing, but in parallel with
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, many problems
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 appear. In
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people
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 living in these countries. The main
problem
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 of young
people
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 is the use of cigarettes and alcohol. Young
people
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 start using these things when they get into bad company.
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, in all
schools
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 there is a group of boys who are part of bad company.
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 group of
people
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 spoil the lives of other
children
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 who strive to be the best.
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I think in these situations parents are to blame who pamper their
children
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 with expensive gifts and give a lot of money exceeding the norm. The key to
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problem
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, I think Moms and Dads should control their
children
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, ask their
children
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 how they are doing, where they are going and
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. Another solution to put there are many cameras in schools that monitor
children
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. Another
problem
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 is
children
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 who live in
a
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poor family, they cannot get a good education,
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and they
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 will work in menial jobs for the rest of their lives. There are
people
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 who drop out of their studies because they have a very high contract and take a job.
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 in India, the population is 1.2 billion of which 20 million are students, which means that 24
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 of the population has a higher degree.The cost of a contract
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 a bachelor's degree is $3,000, and a master's degree is $3,800 to $15,000. Because of
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,
children
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 cannot
enroll
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 in
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 places of study.The solution to
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 issue is to reduce the cost of education and the state should pay the contract to needy
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 and open more funds for students. in
conclusion
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 I want to say it is necessary to solve these problems; if left as it is, it will become a global issue and it will be difficult to solve
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problem
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.

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