Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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are extending these days, many people argue that building great
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for professional athletes is more effective rather than public business buildings. The particular reason for circumstance numerous people have eager to
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as professional players. I consensus with the
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for pro athletes the reason why I think that it affects their achievement.
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, if there is a private
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, there are a lot of professionals who will be specialized in the future.
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, the majority of the humble thought about the government should build
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as a gym, swimming pool, football pitch, and basketball court open to all the population. It is true to say that the authority should indeed, professionals who mostly require a private place to train their competition with their teammates and the coach which will be an acceptable investment for the country's reputation.
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, In Mongolia, three international standardized
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were built between 2020 and 2022.
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, tourism and economic levels upsurged by virtue of these
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, some countries are not allowed to use business furniture because the authorities always focus on their athletes. The reason for
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is that assist to in their achievement and tournament. In Thailand, the government banned people to use certain
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, the National Basketball Team of Thailand won the Asian Basketball Championship. It is the government's policy to increase the country's reputation. From a personal standpoint, if they have a private practice place, I am sure they will do their utmost. Particularly, will help their country's finance, economy, and reputation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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