The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.

The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.
The line graph gives information about the
number
of
stores
that closed down and recently opened
stores
in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
number
of shop closures and openings
decrease
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decreased
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by the end of the given period.
In addition
, both categories show a fluctuating trend. In 2011, there were almost 9000 shops opened,
while
almost 6500 shops closed down before gradually increasing and reaching a peak in 2013. The
number
of shops that were newly opened and closed was almost the same in the next year, around 6700 and 6800 respectively. By 2015, the latter
number
had dropped to below 1000,
then
plummeted in 2016. There was a reverse trend in the
number
of shop closures and openings in the
last
three years of the period.
While
the winding up of the
stores
inclined in 2018, there was a decline in terms of
stores launch
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store launches
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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