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You have discovered a lot of rubbish in a lake near where you live. In the past, the lake had always been clean. Write a letter to the local council. In the letter: describe the type of rubbish that you saw in the lake explain where you think the waste has come from suggest what the council should do about the problem

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to draw attention to the degrading condition of
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lake
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Lake
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 Kankariya. As you might be aware, though
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lake
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 Kankariya is an artificial man-made
lake
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, it is known for its crystal clear water.
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However
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last
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 week, when I was on a morning
walk
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walk,
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 I found a couple of polythene bags floating around.
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, I
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 the attention of the cleaning staff and
get
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 it cleaned, but I am feeling that the condition is getting worse day
bay
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by day
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, yesterday
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. Yesterday
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I
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found the north corner of the
lake
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 was completely filled with plastic
waste
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. As a responsible senior citizen, I decided to investigate and found that
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 the flea market that opened recently
at
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 the north of the
lake
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 is responsible for it. I found that the owners of the stall are collecting garbage in large
waste
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 containers and
in
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every morning, they dump it carelessly in the
lake
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. I believe
this
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 is because they do not have any other place, but the
lake
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, to dump
waste
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. Can you please arrange a
waste
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collecting
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 truck every morning? So they do not have to dispose of
waste
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 in the
lake
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. Hope you will act on
this
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 on an immediate basis and help us
to
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keep our
lake
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 clean. Regards, Jay Patel

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improvement
The letter gives the issue and a plan, but add more on how the problem affects people and the lake, and offer a few steps the council can take.
improvement
Break up long sentences, use clear paragraphs, and small links like 'first', 'also', 'therefore' to connect ideas.
tone
Polite tone and clear request.
content
Gives a clear idea of what to do.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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