Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In the modern era, the population who prefer unqualified
medicines
and treatment has increased. In my opinion, it is a serious negative development because some of the diseases or injuries might even get worse and the whole medical
system
might collapse if all the
patients
trust the
alternative
medicines
more. In ancient times,
medical
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system
had not completely developed,
therefore
, many
alternative
medicines
such
as herbal soup become the only method to
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the disease.
However
, after
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knowledge
being
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highly developed, lots of
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indicate some
of
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treatments
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like massage therapy are quite dangerous, they could even cause paralysed.
For instance
, some grandparents will bring their grandchildren who have
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to the temple and ask for some ash liquid derived from burning
the
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religious paper
then
let their kids drink it
instead
of taking
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the hospital.
As a result
, not only the kids will
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infected but
also
some
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items might damage their health in the future. What is worse, the children might need to take more pills or get three more shoots in the hospital to recover.
On the other hand
, if
the
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people
lose their trust in professional medical treatments and find
alternative
medicines
for help when they
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, the doctors and nurses will become lack
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confident
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and start to think about why they need to study
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university
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and hard working for a long time.
Thus
,
less
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people
will choose the major of doctor or
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because
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spite of they spend a lot of time on studying and internship, the
patients
still
not
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believe in them and find other
people
such
as the staff of the temple or some businessmen who sell “magic herb” to heal themselves In the end, the medical
system
will
destoryed
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destroyed
and none of the
patients
could get properly treatments and even death. In conclusion,
alternative
medicines
will cause a serious problem and decrease the credit between
patients
and doctors. If the government and
people
do not beware
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this
situation,
patients
will suffer from terrible treatment which
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not have scientists permitted. What is more, the
hole
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medical
system
will collapse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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