Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
In the modern era, the population who prefer unqualified
medicines
and treatment has increased. In my opinion, it is a serious negative development because some of the diseases or injuries might even get worse and the whole medical system
might collapse if all the patients
trust the alternative
medicines
more.
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people
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patients
could get properly treatments and even death.
In conclusion, alternative
medicines
will cause a serious problem and decrease the credit between patients
and doctors. If the government and people
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