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In the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write at least 250 words.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
With the advancement of science and technology, literary resources
also
 become digitalized and these
materials
such
 as magazines, newspapers, novels and posts, can
read
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 without paying any capital. In
this
 essay, I will suppose that we can refer
any
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 written material online without purchasing with the development of technology and some
materials
 can not use as
its
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expensiveness
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.
Firstly
, If you have computer literacy, you can read and apply
so
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 many
websides
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websites
 and social groups which give free access to study anything.
For instance
, BBC NEWS is the best online platform which can be used to study the latest information around the world with
the
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flexible
catagorization
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categorization
.
Moreover
, these platforms are easy to handle and we can read
in
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anywhere
which
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 there are internet access
as well as
 portable devices. Nowadays, most
of
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the
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countries consist
free
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 wifi
system
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,
as
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 a result of that we can use
this digital literary
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materials
in
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everywhere
though
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 we are at
office
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 or travelling.
Secondly
,
the
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developing countries can’t reach the target level of reading online as lack of computer literacy and internet facilities.
Furthermore
, some
websides
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websites
 don’t give free access as they need profits through their virtual platforms.
For instance
, famous book publishers never give to read their outputs though it has softcopy without paying the price of the book. Not only that but
also
 they apply it to maintain their status and brand. Eventually, I can conclude that, though we have so many
internet based
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 reading
materials
 some of them can not be read without purchasing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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