Children need to learn the age difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents or teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviors to children?

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The diagram illustrates information about the number of people who visited 3 places ( the coast, mountains and lakes) in a period of 2 decades.

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, the graph shows an increasing trend. All three areas had few visitors at first and all ended with high numbers.

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with, it is clear from the graph that the coast had many people coming to it. It began with just 40 000 visitors, in the next 5 years the figures dropped to less than 40 000. From there, the figures rose sharply to approximately 75 000. Coming to the lakes, a few people visited the place at the start of 1987 but the figure increased simultaneously to above 70 000 in 2002.

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, the numbers gradually dropped and ended at 50 000 in 2007. As for mountain visitors, they started at 20 000 and steadily rose in the next 2 decades and ended at 35 000 in 2007.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

156 words

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