Some countries spend a lot of money preparing competitors in major sports competition such as Olympic Games and football World Cup etc. It is better to spend money encouraging children take up sports at a young age. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely discussed if the nation should spend expenditure on the competitors for any Olympic Games or spend on those youngsters in order to motivate them to play

sports

. I partly agree with the viewpoint of giving an opportunity to the younger ones to participate in

sports

while

preparing the athletes is equally significant. Making room for young children to participate in

sports

inculcate

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inculcates

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confidence and

provide

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provides

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a strong starting point to display their potential, it is good to open up their

mind

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minds

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while

they are young to play

sports

because it will mould their personality

while

growing up, for ,instance a timid boy who just stays in the house playing computer games will go out and play outdoor like football or basketball, he will overcome his shyness by socializing to other children.

Furthermore

, it gives them a good training ground that can be essential for winning.

Whereas

, providing

such

amount for the players to compete in world competitions to represent a specific nation and to showcase their own talent and culture to others;

for instance

, Manny Pacquiao a world-famous professional boxer gave honour to his country by winning 62 titles in boxing competitions, through him and other athletes, people around the world able to know more about their country and it's culture. In conclusion, allocating

such

an amount to perform in world competitions is equally significant as giving a portion to young children to cooperate in

sports

, in order for them to have a good foundation and training to compete in the Olympic Games in the future.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:

grassroots level
uncover hidden talents
sustainable sporting culture
healthcare costs
teamwork
discipline
elite sports
fosters
unhealthy competition
engagement
initiatives
cost-effective
broader impact

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