The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
Given bar graph illustrates the information regarding the expenditure of two countries
such
as
France
and
Uk
on consumer products in 2010.
Overall
,it is
cleared
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that
the
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cars were the most popular
consuming
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consumer
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goods in the
France
and
Uk
.
Firstly
,we can see that
France
consumed 400,000 cars in the year
of
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2010.
Secondly
,In the year
of
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2010 computers were
similar
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similarly
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consumed
by
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in
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the
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France
as
compare
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to
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the car
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car
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cars
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.
Thirdly
,Books were lesser obsess by
the
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France
about 300,000.
Therefore
,perfume and cameras grip
were
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decreased as compared to other
good
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goods
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in 2010 ground sterling pounds.
On the other hand
,cars
were obsess
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were obsessed
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by the
uk
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UK
about 4,50,000.
However
,computers and books
were goes
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went
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up and down in the mid of 3,70,000.
While
perfume overwhelms
i
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the
uk
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UK
around 1,50,000.
Consequently
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cameras
were
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consumed
high
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a high
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range of pound sterling
product
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products
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around 3,50,000.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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