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Recently, it is common for people not to know their neighbours. What is the cause of the problem? What can be done to solve this problem.

#people #neighbours
Nowadays people become very busy with their gadgets like mobile phones and laptops because of
this
 reason the community is not willing to meet with neighbours. These days it is very common in a culture that no one is communicating with their neighbours.
Firstly
,Day by day human beings' relations are vulnerable and the community is busy with their lifestyle
as well as
 spending a lot of time in front of the Television. It is very imperative for every parent to meet their heir with their siblings
as well as
 with their adjacent nation. Research conducted by the Times of India divulged that offspring who are facing problems in association, mostly know their neighbours.
Secondly
, not only in school but
also
 at home parents have to give proper guidance to their offspring to communicate with their peer groups and maintain healthy relationships. Parents
also
 not bringing their children to their aunt's and uncle's home. Meanwhile apart from education communication is
also
 a bounteous thing in the community.
Although
this
 is not a mistake of babies it is going to be very common in towns like Delhi and Mumbai. In ,villages it juxtaposes different types of cultures
as well as
 best relations. The population is increasing exorbitantly but the culture is not up to the mark. ,
Moreover
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 it is very beneficial to people to meet their loved ones rather than spend time in media. In conclusion, to tackle
this
 problem children have to give a particular time to spend with their amicable ones
this
 leads to change in civilization.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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