The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
number
of inquiries sent to the Tourist Information Office in a particular city through three means of communication between January and June of the year 2011.
It is clear that
visitors to the city made more
inquires
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in
person
and via
telephone
,
while
letters or emails became
less
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a less
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common choice.
Also
, the
number
of enquiries in
person
experienced the most dramatic change among the given methods. In the first month of 2011, the Tourist Information Office received 900
enquires
from
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by
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telephone
,
while
just under 800 ones were sent by letter or email. Not many tourists chose
asking
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to ask
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for information in
person
, with just above 400 queries. Over the next three months,
telephone
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the telephone
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still remained the most popular method with 1000
enquires
. Meanwhile, the
number
of
enquires
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enquiries
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made in
person
saw a considerable growth to 800
of
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emails, surpassing the figure for email and postal
enquires
. From March to June, the office received significantly more
enquires
in
person
. Just after four months, the
number
of
enquires
by
this
way soared by more than 1,000 to peak at 1,900 in June. The period
also
recorded a significant rise to 1,600 in the figure for
telephone
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the telephone
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.
By contrast
, fewer people sent emails or
letter
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letters
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to make
enquires
and the
number
ended at the lowest point of only under 400.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, person, telephone, enquires with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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