The news about violent crimes may frighten people or, on the contrary, encourage them to commit a crime. Therefore, some believe that these types of news should not be reported in newspapers or on TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It cannot be refuted that some
news
about violent crimes could frighten
people
so that we could teach them by using
this
method,
this
reason makes some suggestible
people
form
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the viewpoint that these types of
news
should be reported in newspapers or TV,
Nevertheless
,
this
state suffers from some misconceptions and should be checked out precisely. As far as cultural atmosphere, society, and mental health are concerned, I believe that we should control these types of
news
to spread.
Firstly
,
this
kind
of
news
would be harmful to the public's mental health. To be more specific, violent criminal pictures or videos always contain blooding bodies or other scary content, these would be a serious nightmare for most
of
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normal
people
.
For instance
,if there is a cut little girl scrolling the TV programmes up and down happily, she suddenly sees a scary picture of a person who is blooding and is
hitted
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fitted
by someone.The little girl would never forget the terrible picture and be scared every night, in the long run, she would suffer from some mental illness.
Additionally
,
this
kind
of
news
is
also
dangerous for our society.To be more exact,
people
, especially teenagers, always like to mimic behaviours online,if they often watch
this
kind
of
news
, they would be influenced by them and their violent genes would be promoted. If they are in some situations when they are really angry, it's quite possible for them to learn actions in
this
violent
news
to do some criminal things,
such
as killing others.
Thus
, limiting
people
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to access violent
news
plays an important role if we want to live in a safe society.
However
,a voice raises that
this
kind
of
news
could make
people
scared so that they wouldn't access these criminal activities anymore, Ironically,
this
kind
of emotion would lead to anger and criminal behaviours
finally
. We should make efforts to build a relaxing and peaceful cultural atmosphere so that
people
would be friendly to others and have happy hearts with love and peace. In conclusion,I still firmly hold that we should control the
news
about violence and crimes to spread and provide the
pubilc
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peaceful, friendly and healthy atmosphere to live in.
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