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In the past, lectures were the tradi2onal method of teaching large numbers of students in a classroom. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

#lectures #method #numbers #students #classroom #technology #approach
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advanced technologies impacts not only on
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the economic
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 growth of
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the country
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,
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but
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altering
education
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technique
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.
Usage
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 of
technology
 rises day by day. I think that the benefits of
new
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 approach outweigh its drawbacks
To begin
 with,
technology
 evolution opened doors to building
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skills in students like searching
information
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 that they never
known
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,a bunch of investigations which leads to the novel creation process.
Additionally
,individuals become literate and educated thereby
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 knowledge to the development of
motherland
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.Another advantage is
time saving
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 for long
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 from point A to B,which is convenient
to
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 the human being who has
full
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a full
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 timetable.
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,30min of
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the time
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 can
spent
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 reading books or
another
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 hobby.
On the other hand
, every
education
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 institution can not afford
procuring
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 technologies for all students because of
technology
 price.It can be seen that devices like
computer
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computers
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 or
laptop
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laptops
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,electronic
board
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 and special
equipments
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equipment
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 for doing labs or for
sport
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sports
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 become more expensive.The price of laptops on the market cost at least 30000
tenge
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 In Kazakhstan,so in school should be from 600 to 1000 laptops.
This
 information proves the fact that without good
provision
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provisions
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of
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 the state,not every school/university will have access to
technology
. Ultimately,
evolution
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the evolution
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 of
technology
 has
own
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its own
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 advantages including
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 limitations that can be solved by humanity.For evolving
problem
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 should pay attention and find ways to resolve drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Multimedia content
  • Automated grading
  • Global collaboration
  • Critical thinking
  • Personalized learning
  • Digital divide
  • Interactive software
  • E-learning platforms
  • Virtual classrooms
  • Technological literacy
  • Distance education
  • Digital resources
  • Cybersecurity concerns
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Pedagogical approaches
  • Disruption in education
  • Innovative teaching methods
  • Accessibility features
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