Some people feel that fashion is like art and a significant part of society, while others feel that fashion is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is an argument that some people consider
fashion
plays
a
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important role in our society, but others insist that devoting
fashion
is waste of time and money.
This
essay focuses on both views
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and ended up with my opinion.
Although
fashion
has been the biggest industry in the world, some people tend not to take care of their
fashion
styles.
This
is because choosing clothes
in
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a daily basis usually takes time, and
fashinating
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fascinating
fashion
brand puts higher prices on their
poducts
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products
. It is obviously
waste
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of time and money. Take
for
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example, Steve Jobs, a forerunner of Apple,
is
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who is
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famous for wearing
a
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same t-shirt and
a
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jeans
everday
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everyday
every day
.
On the other hand
, apparently,
fashion
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the fashion
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industry has influenced
in
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society and one of the main elements is
fasion
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fashion
events which are held in capital cities
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around
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the world. In France, Paris
Fashion
Week
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is helds
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helds
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held
annually, and its event is recognized all over the world. A number of
fashion
brands
such
as GUCCI or CELINE announce their later products by walking down
on
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the runway.
Tourlists
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Tourists
,
fashion
designers, and media companies
comes
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to visit
at
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Paris to watch their runways. It effectively affects
economy
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the economy
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on
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the country and
a
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is a
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benefical
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beneficial
opportunity to exchange cultural
fashion
styles with each
countries
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country
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. As we have seen, there are no easy answers to
this
, with some people saying buying clothes
are
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totally meaningless and others believing
fashion
has a huge impact on society.
However
, I would agree with the latter opinion because it enhances cultural exchange among various races, and it is part of our life.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-expression
  • cultural heritage
  • global economy
  • fast fashion
  • environmental harm
  • consumerism
  • innovation
  • trends
  • superficiality
  • cultural identity
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