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Some people think one should stay all their life in the same job, whereas others advocate changing jobs from time to time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals opine that a person should
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 workplace for
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 whole life,
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 others strongly support changing jobs after a period of time. From my point of view, individuals ought to choose an occupation based on their own preferences. On the
one
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 hand, employees who stay in a single profession may gain proficiency in
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 as they have done the same tasks over years.
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, there is a high chance of those
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 promoted and generously remunerated
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 their productivity.
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, as they are experienced predecessors, newcomers in their companies perhaps will pay great respect to them. Another benefit of working in the same place is the job's stability.
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, as a man choose not to switch to another career, he has a secure job.
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,
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new
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 is unexpected and
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 can not speculate what is lying in wait, so it's possible that
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 fails to satisfy the job's requirements and gets the sack. Nothing can ensure whether the person can find a different
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 soon afterwards.
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, approaching various positions assists individuals in developing new skills. Distinct professions involve separated assignments, so
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 changing jobs can do a diversity of
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 and cultivate manifold techniques.
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, as an office
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 you synthesize information and write statistic reports,
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 a scientist examines samples and does experiments.
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,
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 probably discover their hidden potential and passion when switching
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. An initial doctor may realize her talent and joy from teaching others if she tries giving a lecture somewhere. Having personal fondness and
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 ability to do a piece of
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,
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 can be more contented and perform better.
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, I believe both views have their own advantages.
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, it is necessary that
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 take the pros of each
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 style into consideration so as to make the most suitable decision.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job security
  • stability
  • financial insecurity
  • expertise
  • advance their careers
  • promotions
  • pay raises
  • recognition
  • personal and professional growth
  • work environments
  • responsibilities
  • skill set
  • adaptability
  • job satisfaction
  • mental health
  • stuck
  • stagnant
  • lucrative
  • job offers
  • commitment
  • instability
  • retirement plans
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