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in the future all cars, buses and truks will be driverless. the only people travelling inside these vehicle will be passengers.

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with the continuous development of technology, it is
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believed
 that
tommorw
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tomorrow
vehicle
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 will have more suficticated technology than they have now.
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 other words, they will be capable of driving them selfs and
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 not
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require
 a driver.in my opinion,
this
 is a big advantage
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 all
humains
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humans
. in
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i
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 will elaborate
furthermore
.
to begin
, driverless cars are a big step
to
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 humanity if it accomplished . for
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numerous
 causes,
firstly
,
less
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car
 accidents on the road that will reduce the number of injured people in hospitals to make
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space
 for other patients.
secondly
,
less
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fewer cars
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car
 will
needed
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 to
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manufacture
 because
car
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the car
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 can take
some one
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someone
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 to his
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destination
then
 come back to take another.
for example
, it will be capable to take the father of a
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family
 to his work
then
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returned
return
 to home to take the
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kids
 to their school.so, it will be multitasking.
however
, it will consume more fuel and may lead to
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of
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 co2 gases in
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 ,which will cause more
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pollution
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 ,only if it
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is powerd
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powerd
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powered
 by
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 engine than
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conventiuale
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conventional
 one.
moreover
, it may not be safe unless it has
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programed
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 computer which knows how to react to difficult situations of traffics.
to conclude
, it is true that
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smart driverless cars may have some
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disadvantages
disadvantageous
, but
it
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they
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 can be
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outrighted
 by several means. nowadays,
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a car
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car
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cars
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 have a small
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ability
 to drive
its self
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itself
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 but in
future
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this
 technology will develop rapidly .
then
, it will not need humans to
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control
 them
this
 will help many
human
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 to
traviel
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travel
safle
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safe
sale
eventhough
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even though
thay
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they
 can not drive.
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