Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products any ware in the world. Is it a positive or negative development?

Today, getting
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global
similar to them
due to
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are
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willing to provide the same
goods
wherever in the more countries. It
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this
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approach
might result in imposing economical issues for some countries.
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incresasing
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increasing
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the probelom
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probelom
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problem
of culture bring about creating that development might cause
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an increasing
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problem
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in part of society
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culture
.
Initially
,
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of
people
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became
same that older because all have
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access
to buying
every thing
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everything
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.
While
more of
goods
prouduct
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produced
product
in several extended
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cities
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.
For instance
, the china government found that
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recently
amount of china
goods
in the world is 69%
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the
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global
globe
.
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more
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types
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of
this
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product
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via
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more
people
in
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apply
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wherever.
On the other hand
, imposing economical hassle and
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part of income in
country
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the country
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might result in
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decreasing
prouduct
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product
due to
some
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company
which
them
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they
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have more
product
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products
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bring impose for
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the economy
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each
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country because some
people
want
goods
for
low
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a low
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price and more various.
Secondly
, growing similar in
people
wear not only imposing
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culture
cultural
problem but
also
doing damage
for
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identity.
In other words
,
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similar
to wear in more
people
each city might result in
decling
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declining
use of older
calture
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culture
.
For example
the university of oxford
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found
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that
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local wear
that
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20 years ago
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about 60%.
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,
people
like
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new
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models
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for
faverit
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favourite
brands.
This
approch
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approach
can
demage
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damage
to
caltuer
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culture
capture
because ever wear in each country might bring about
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conflict
in
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the caltuer
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caltuer
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culture
for each visitor.
On the other hand
after the same
years
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creat new wear in
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society
to
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affect
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coultuer
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culture
and some
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change
it.
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