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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

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It has been argued that the
internet
 has a negative impact on
students
, and some people believe that its use in educational facilities should be banned. In my opinion, the
internet
 increases the level of
education
 and allows
students
 to study a variety of fields from their homes. For these reasons, I completely disagree with the statement given. Nowadays, people live in the technological era and
this
 has a direct effect on the available knowledge
that is
 within our devices,
such
 as laptops or mobile phones.
In addition
, the knowledge available currently is much bigger than in the previous century.
For example
,
students
 now are able to learn how to build a bridge only by watching videos and doing
internet
 research. Thanks to the
internet
, the quality of
education
 has improved and has had a direct impact on the increase of knowledge.
Moreover
, the
internet
 has allowed different ways to learn. Learning through online lessons is possible nowadays and more and more
students
 are being benefited from
this
 discovery.
Students
 around the world are able to learn different languages, study online degrees from their own countries, or keep learning if they are sick. All of these benefits outweigh the drawbacks and increase the level of
education
. Previously,
students
 only studied the degrees available in their city, but nowadays they do not have a limit.
Furthermore
, if everyone has access to
education
 thanks to the
internet
, the whole world will be benefited.
To conclude
, I completely disagree with the statement, because I believe that it has more positive than negative effects, increasing the level of
education
 and providing educational opportunities to everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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