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The development of artificial intelligence will not help humanity

Since the beginning of artificial intelligence, there has been a debate about the advantages and disadvantages of its development,
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 our classmates have already talked about its benefits, now we are going to mention the risks that are not talked about and that They have the world in danger. One of the reasons why the unemployment rate in most countries is so low is
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 the presence of robots and automation in companies. It is estimated that by 2025 we will reach 85 million lost jobs.
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 is a concern and it is not good for the people who need work. We have all been victims of the violation of privacy thanks to artificial intelligence, now everything we do on our devices is monitored by some companies to offer us trips, products and even channels to lose weight. in 2018 a report that talks about the potential abuse of social networks and the manipulation of data, one of them tik tok

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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