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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the number of
visitors
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 to four different global
museums
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 over 35 year period from 1980 and 2015.
Overall
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,
while
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 the number of
visitors
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 to the
Louvre
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 and Vatican
museums
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 increased, the London Science
Museum
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 saw a downward trend in
visitors
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.
In addition
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, Shenzhen
museum
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 remained with the same amount of
visitors
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 as at beginning of the duration. In 1980,
Louvre
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 was visited by almost 8
million
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 people,
whereas
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 4
million
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 on average attended all other
museums
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. Over the following
decade
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museum
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 decreased and were around 3.5
million
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 together. Meanwhile, in 1990
visitors
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 to
Louvre
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 and Vietnam
museum
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 rose by around 1
million
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 each. For the rest of the duration, amount of people who attended the
Louvre
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 and Vatican
museums
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 continued rising and were just under 10
million
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visitors
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 in 2015.
By contrast
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,
visitors
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 to the London
museum
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 declined moderately and were above 2
million
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 in 2015. In the year 2015, Shenzhen
museum
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 was visited by almost the same number as in 1980.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museums, louvre, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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