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some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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. Some people admit that
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 of
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 and
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 is the main part of
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, others believe that there are many aspects that cause
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the
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. I believe that there are many aspects that can be
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damage
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the rice plant and result
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 the farmer which leads to
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 of the crops. On the other sides, the increase
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transportations
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 which
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 carbon dioxide had been
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of
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 the environment.
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 to human
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being
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 hotter today than
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human
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the
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all species in the world
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animals
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 and
plants
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. Because of
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, the weather can be a long time in summer which leads the difficulties for
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 and
plants
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 in getting water for their production. It is possibly leading to
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 extinction of them which will have serious damage
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 the earth and human
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 in the future. In conclusion, based on the evidence analysed, many aspects
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can be
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 environmental issues. It cannot be neglected and should be maintained
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life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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