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The table shows information about the numbers of people who took the seven most popular airlines in the US in 1995 and 2005.

The table shows information about the numbers of people who took the seven most popular airlines in the US in 1995 and 2005.
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the table compares data about the numbers of American people taking the seven different
airlines
 from 1995 to 2005.
overall
, it is clear from the table that the number of passengers in all
airlines
 increased during
this
 period. the number of people who took jetblue airways showed
a
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considerable growth. in
years
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1995 and 2005 , delta air lines
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 the most popular airway of the seven
airlines
, which had 500700
persons
 in 1995 and 1064000
persons
 in 2005 (a 113% increase).
while
 the figures for southwest
airlines
 and united
airlines
 were in second and third place, they just saw a lower growth rate 96% and 33% each) .
by contrast
, over
this
 period, the number of passengers who took jetblue airways saw a noticeable increase (249%) , from 86000 to 300000, which was the highest increase among the seven
airlines
. especially, its figure for passengers in 2005 overtook the figures for Alaska
airlines
 (257000
persons
) and Hawaiian
Airlines
 (250000
persons
).
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