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The table shows information about the numbers of people who took the seven most popular airlines in the US in 1995 and 2005.

The table shows information about the numbers of people who took the seven most popular airlines in the US in 1995 and 2005.
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the table compares data about the numbers of American people taking the seven different
airlines
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 from 1995 to 2005.
overall
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, it is clear from the table that the number of passengers in all
airlines
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 increased during
this
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 period. the number of people who took jetblue airways showed
a
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apply
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considerable growth. in
years
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the years
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of
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1995 and 2005 , delta air lines
was
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 the most popular airway of the seven
airlines
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, which had 500700
persons
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 in 1995 and 1064000
persons
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 in 2005 (a 113% increase).
while
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 the figures for southwest
airlines
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 and united
airlines
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 were in second and third place, they just saw a lower growth rate 96% and 33% each) .
by contrast
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, over
this
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 period, the number of passengers who took jetblue airways saw a noticeable increase (249%) , from 86000 to 300000, which was the highest increase among the seven
airlines
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. especially, its figure for passengers in 2005 overtook the figures for Alaska
airlines
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 (257000
persons
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) and Hawaiian
Airlines
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 (250000
persons
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).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words airlines, persons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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