The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The revenue and the expenditures of a children’s charity in the USA in 2016
is
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figured
by
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in
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pie
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the pie
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charts above. Generally, donated food takes the biggest part of the income. The charity
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received contributions
of
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community
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the community
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, government grants, investment, and
program’s
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profit as their revenue. They spend most of their money
for
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program services and released the rest for fundraising and other affairs like management and general. In 2016,
an
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US-based children’s charity accept more than 53 and a half million
dollar
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dollars
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and donated food just over
four fifths
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. Community contributions is having the second-largest part with 10.4%. The foundation
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held several
program
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in 2016 and got 2.2%
from
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its total. Other sources combined, like investment, government allowance,
and
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etc
,
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were not even reaching 1% of the total. The services of the
children
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children's
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foundation
being
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the biggest part with more than 95% of their expenses. The rest of the outgoing
are
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used to pay the fundraising and
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the organization’s
operational
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operations
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with 2.4% and 1.6%,
respectivelly
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respectively
. The total
of
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expenditures is less than the income with over
than
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$300,000 remaining
,
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and
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which
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means they were financially
health
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healthy
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.
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