The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The revenue and the expenditures of a children’s charity in the USA in 2016
is
figured Change the verb form
are
by
Change preposition
in
pie
charts above.
Generally, donated food takes the biggest part of the income. The charity Correct article usage
the pie
also
received contributions of
Change preposition
from
community
, government grants, investment, and Add an article
the community
program’s
profit as their revenue. They spend most of their money Change noun form
program
for
program services and released the rest for fundraising and other affairs like management and general.
In 2016, Change preposition
on
an
US-based children’s charity accept more than 53 and a half million Change the article
a
dollar
and donated food just over Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
four fifths
. Community contributions is having the second-largest part with 10.4%. The foundation Add a hyphen
four-fifths
also
held several program
in 2016 and got 2.2% Change to a plural noun
programs
from
its total. Other sources combined, like investment, government allowance, Change preposition
of
and
etcCorrect word choice
apply
,
were not even reaching 1% of the total.
The services of the Remove the comma
apply
children
foundation Change noun form
children's
being
the biggest part with more than 95% of their expenses. The rest of the outgoing Wrong verb form
are
are
used to pay the fundraising and Change the verb form
is
also
the organization’s operational
with 2.4% and 1.6%, Replace the word
operations
respectivelly
. The total Correct your spelling
respectively
of
expenditures is less than the income with over Change preposition
apply
than
$300,000 remainingChange preposition
apply
,
Remove the comma
apply
and
means they were financially Correct word choice
which
health
.Replace the word
healthy
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