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The way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Interacting with people has changed a lot through technology. It
had
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played a positive role in development. we will be discussing
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tech below.
To begin
 with, technology has boosted the method of communication, as in
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day
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, it took 5 to 6 days for 1 letter to reach from
one
place
 to another which caused
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 delay.
Moreover
, in emergency situations, it was very difficult to communicate and pass
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information from
one
place
 to another. But now, after
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technology has changed
alot
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a lot
as
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it just
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take 1 second of time by using the apps like
facebook
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Facebook
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,
twitter
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,
instagram
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 and
watsapp
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WhatsApp
 for sending
the
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message from
one
place
 to another
place
,
round
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 the clock and all over the earth.
For
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 make an international call, people had
spended
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 thousands and lakhs of money to speak to
one
 another in earlier days.
The things
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had
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changed
a
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alot
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lot
a lot
 after
internet
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the internet
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 came into
existense
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existence
, as
this
 service has become free now for all
the
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users through apps like
Watsapp
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,
Instagram
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and Instagram
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 to make an international
call
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 and talk to them without having any fear of talk time and balance deduction.
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