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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to . How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience

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Some claim that tourism has numerous detrimental repercussions on the nations that
travelers
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 visit. the first one when you think about
this
, it is false but you keep thinking you will find something it is true. I won't explain to you how it is true. In my opinion, when tourism travels to another
country
 they do not know their
culture
as well as
 they are excited about
this
 and when they find new
culture
 they try to mix it with their
culture
 so they
change
 something,
for example
, they go to the local village and they push the new clothing there and they think can add them clothe to their clothe and the local
people
 watch
this
 and they try to
change
 clothe
this
 is a few actual for
change
culture
 sometimes they
change
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the behavior
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behavior
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behaviour
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 of
people
for instance
 in some
country
people
 do not pay money to homeless
people
 and they do not know
this
 and pay money to them so
this
 is a problem for other
people
country
 for
this
 situation.
On the other hand
, they send a new
culture
 to another
country
 or city and in the period of time the
culture
 of
this
country
 has been changed and they forgot the old
culture
 because the past
people
 sent the
culture
 to them and they changed with the new
culture
 so they could not send the old
culture
 to their children. In my opinion, the
people
 who travel to another
country
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should respect that
culture
. they do not try to
change
 it or add something to the
culture
. sometimes they can find new things from their cultures and
this
 is the best part of travel.
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