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Solution essay. The amount of obese people have grown, what should they do?

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In past decades,
people
 were more concerned about having a healthy life and controlling
weight
 for many reasons.
Although
 in some regions of the
world
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 the cases of obesity and health problems have greatly increased. I think that one of the major problems is that
people
 do not have
time
 to eat healthily, and fast foods are an easy option. Another problem is that some
people
 do not like to do exercises to improve their physical fitness levels.
Nevertheless
, there are solutions to these two problems. Having a quick meal is always a good option when a person does not have
time
 to cook at that moment. Most of the population, especially the ones who have access to cheaper fast-
food
 restaurants get used to that option when they do not have
time
 to prepare a proper healthy meal. For
this
, a good solution is, during free
time
,
people
 can cook healthy
food
 and put it in small portions keeping them in the freezer for quick preparation later: simply reheat and serve. By doing
this
,
people
 always have healthy
food
 stored in their homes. A second major problem to keeping a balanced diet and proper
weight
 is by doing some exercise to improve physical fitness, not just to look good, but
also
 to be healthy and avoid becoming obese. Working out at the gym is always the first thought to lose
weight
, but
people
 forget that doing some other activities could help, like biking and hiking, to improve blood circulation and vitamin D uptake. In conclusion, studies show that the high numbers of obesity are caused by many
people
 consuming junk
food
 and not doing proper exercise. Of course,
people
 do not need to stop eating fast
food
, but decreased consumption helps. Doing some enjoyable exercises
also
 helps. Having a balance of healthy and exercising is not easy, but if a person wants to have a healthy life, live longer, and reduce
weight
, they must do
this
.
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