School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and back to teaching basic study skills.

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to
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computers
.
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is causing
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impact on one's important skills
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. Teachers do not need to
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use
computers
during the lesson at all costs. It is
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than
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lesson
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. In my point of view, using
computers
in
school
is beneficial for every single student .
For instance
, students can learn modern
technology
in order to study .
Also
, it can be supportive for professors. Because all classes
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during
this
time teachers can not lecture every single pupil .
However
,
computers
might deal with that problem. What is more, most
school children
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used to spend their time in front of
screen
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the screen
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. They play games , make programs , learn languages made friends on social media .
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generation
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do not need to have to know reading and writing skills . Working with artificial intelligence can replace
school
subjects in the future.
Thus
,
computers
take possession and spread in many countries. Who is curious about
technology
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can become
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Technology
developer is which job is attracting a lot of students because one's can make big money . Some people argued that working with
technology
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a serious effect on their children . Because it should cause health issues
such
as eyesight ,
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posture . Parents mention that schools should place more emphasis on skills .
This
is because professors must have a good knowledge base on their subjects and one's primary role is to import information.
That is
why teachers do not require any robots . All in all
school
children tend to watch lap top.
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lack of responsibility to learn other activities or show less interest
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class .
As a result
,schools have to tackle that problem
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reliance
  • Literacy skills
  • Handwriting
  • Cognitive development
  • Memory retention
  • Digital engagement
  • Tactile experience
  • Enhance
  • Diversify
  • Balanced skill set
  • Traditional teaching methods
  • Digital literacy
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Reading comprehension
  • Critical thinking
  • Technological proficiency
  • Educational technology
  • Foundational skills
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