Pupils are addicting to use computers . This is causing terrifying impact on one's important skills such as reading , writing . Teachers do not need to have use computers during the lesson at all costs. It is useful educate ordinary method than modern lesson .

In my point of view, using
computers
in
school
is beneficial for every single student .
For instance
, students can learn modern technology in order to study .
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, it can be supportive for professors. Because
,
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all classes
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during
this
time teachers can not lecture every single pupil .
However
,
computers
might deal with that problem. What is more, most
school
children used to spend their time in front of
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lap top
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. They play games , make programs , learn languages ,
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made friends
in
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social media .
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generation
are not need
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to have to know reading and writing skills . Working with
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a computer
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computer
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can replace
school
subjects in the future.
Thus
,
computers
take possession and spread in many countries. Who is curious about technology relate work
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a lot of students
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because one's can make big money . Some people argued that working with
computers
might be
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effect on their children . Because it should
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cause health issues
such
as eyesight ,
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pose . Parents mention that schools should place more emphasis on skills .
This
is because professors must have a good knowledge base on their subjects and one's primary role is to import information.
That is
why teachers do not require any robots . All in all
school
children tend to watch lap top.
This
is causing
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lack of responsibility to learn other activities ,
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interest
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schools have to tackle that problem .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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