.Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many claim that the
number
of men and women Use synonyms
students
should be the same in all Use synonyms
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Although
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universities
should provide some situations where Use synonyms
students
from both genders can participate and choose freely, I disagree with accepting just an equal Use synonyms
number
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students
in both genders.
On the one hand, the equal Use synonyms
number
of Use synonyms
students
in every major is unrealistic. First of all, I would mention it is wrong that Use synonyms
universities
prioritize Use synonyms
students
of their sex. Use synonyms
Then
we should consider how many Linking Words
students
of both genders tend to Use synonyms
study
the subjects. Many Use synonyms
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according to
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, many women tend to Linking Words
study
nursing, which means, the Use synonyms
number
of females is more than men in nursing, Use synonyms
while
numerous men account for the figure for technical Linking Words
majors
like mechanician or technician. So Use synonyms
universities
should not consider the gender of Use synonyms
students
.
On the other, Use synonyms
universities
will face a lack of Use synonyms
students
in Use synonyms
majors
which lead to bankruptcy. Use synonyms
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universities
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students
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according to
their gender equally, some classes will be empty because some Linking Words
majors
are in demand and more popular. So the Use synonyms
universities
go bankrupt and can not handle the expenses Use synonyms
as well as
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universities
. Use synonyms
In addition
, Linking Words
universities
should consider 3 factors of Use synonyms
students
which are, Use synonyms
firstly
, the interests of Linking Words
students
which let them have free choices in choosing their subject. Use synonyms
secondly
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students
should receive a scholarship that encourages them to Use synonyms
study
harder. Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
number
of demands in a major in which more classes should be held to accept a wide variety of Use synonyms
students
.
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according to
their gender is not common, and I disagree with Linking Words
this
scheme because of its consequences.Linking Words
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