.Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many claim that the
number
of men and women students
should be the same in all majors
. Although
universities
should provide some situations where students
from both genders can participate and choose freely, I disagree with accepting just an equal number
of students
in both genders.
On the one hand, the equal number
of students
in every major is unrealistic. First of all, I would mention it is wrong that universities
prioritize students
of their sex. Then
we should consider how many students
of both genders tend to study
the subjects. Many students
tend to study
in a specific major according to
their interests. For example
, many women tend to study
nursing, which means, the number
of females is more than men in nursing, while
numerous men account for the figure for technical majors
like mechanician or technician. So universities
should not consider the gender of students
.
On the other, universities
will face a lack of students
in majors
which lead to bankruptcy. Firstly
, If universities
schedule students
according to
their gender equally, some classes will be empty because some majors
are in demand and more popular. So the universities
go bankrupt and can not handle the expenses as well as
other universities
. In addition
, universities
should consider 3 factors of students
which are, firstly
, the interests of students
which let them have free choices in choosing their subject. secondly
, the qualification of highly intelligent students
should receive a scholarship that encourages them to study
harder. Finally
, the number
of demands in a major in which more classes should be held to accept a wide variety of students
.
In conclusion, scheduling students
equally according to
their gender is not common, and I disagree with this
scheme because of its consequences.Submitted by dayansabet on
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