In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping center or mall to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The number of shopping malls is increasing as the population grows in the city. Some argue that shopping malls take retail boutiques’ customers and because of
this
Linking Words
, many small stores are forced to be closed. I believe that
this
Linking Words
has a negative impact on culture, traditions, and the local recession.
First,
Linking Words
many retail shops are selling handmade, and traditional products,
for example
Linking Words
, indigenous neckless. Closing their store means that the community losses the identification of their own culture.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, items being sold in
such
Linking Words
stores tend to be very unique, and creative, and sometimes they are made for specific purposes.
For instance
Linking Words
, skincare items for extremely dry skin. If they are gone, many people will get lost since their preferred specified items are not purchasable at the regular markets.
Second,
Linking Words
there is a possibility that the regional business, not only small shops, might be bankrupt. Those small shops are run by people living originally
while
Linking Words
the big malls are often occupied by franchisees. Even though the number of people going to
such
Linking Words
shopping mall and spending a huge portion of their money there, its profit will be sent to the store’s headquarter directly.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, prosperity in the local market brought cash to the community, which will make the local economy capable to run on its own. In conclusion, I believe that shifting the population to use the mall for their shopping from the retail stores in the neighbourhood impacts negatively.
This
Linking Words
is because it makes the city less traditional and cultured.
In addition
Linking Words
, it might cause bankruptcy in the local economy.
Submitted by akiyamam on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: