“In general, the relationship among members of family is looser and looser. What are the causes and effects of this phenomenon?

Nowadays, numerous
people
mention that the family bond is increasingly looser. In my opinion,
this
is primarily caused by technological
advance
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and globalization. I believe some
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include
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social networking services and the growing popularity of studying abroad. The first cause of
this
phenomenon is that technology has dramatically improved worldwide.
This
change has introduced social networking services
such
as Instagram and Twitter to every individual;
moreover
,
the
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vast number of
people
become addicted to
use
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these applications around the world.
Although
it is essential for the public to enjoy
the
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social networking
survices
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services
in terms of connecting with others, using
those application
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require
consumer
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the consumer
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to spend lots of time. In
this
case, many individuals
are tend
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to
be struggle
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with preparing time in order to
buil
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build
good
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relationship
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relationships
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with their
family
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families
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. The second cause of
those situation
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is that globalization has progressed. In
this
development, living abroad to study has gradually gained popularity. It was
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pattern that every family member
stay
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in their house and share their daily life in the past few
decade
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;
however
,
people
spend much
time
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outside than
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parents'
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house in the modern days.
As a result
, some family
member
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members
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might find it
chalenging
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challenging
to attain the
oppotunity
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opportunity
to maintain
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connection with their family. In conclusion,
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technological progress and globalization have caused too much usage of social networking
survices
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services
and
separeting
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separating
separation
from family because of migration. These phenomena
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make
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people
to
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restrict building great
relatiohship
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relationship
relationships
with their family members.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geographical mobility
  • close-knit
  • individualistic cultures
  • personal achievement
  • collective
  • paradoxically
  • economic pressures
  • isolation
  • emotional support
  • mental health issues
  • traditional family roles
  • external support structures
  • community groups
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