The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The chart below illustrates the information about people who consumes
coffee
and
tea
in Five Australian cities for the past four
week
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weeks
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(Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
and Hobart).
Overall
, the figures are given out in
percentage
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. It is evident going to have a cup of
coffee
or
tea
is far more common
except
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than
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in
Adelaide
. On the controversy, people that buy instant
coffee
was higher than
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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that buy fresh
coffee
. As the bar
suggest
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, Sydney and Melbourne
in
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number. The
percentage
of people consuming
tea
and
coffee
was roughly 61% meanwhile; the figure for Melbourne was a little higher by 63%
in addition
, the rest around 45 % of
individual
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individuals
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that
stay
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in Sydney. The rest of the city which
purchasing
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coffee
and
tea
is Hobart
then
follows
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followed
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by Brisbane and
Adelaide
. The
percentage
number is 51% and 49 %. In short, it can be in different
percentage
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Brisbane and
Adelaide
is
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the same at 34% meanwhile Hobart was highest at 38%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, adelaide, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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