it is easier for wealthy people to maintain good health than it is for people who do not have large amounts of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there is a large discrepancy in
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status between the upper class and middle-lower class
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. Some
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believed that it is harder
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people
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who only have
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or small amount of money to stay healthy compared to
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rich
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. I concur that a lot of efforts and conditions
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are needed to maintain
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people
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health
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status, and it is effortless to
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society
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to maintain it.
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that have a lot of money usually
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in a nice
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placce
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place
places
that
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good
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that
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are impactfull
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impactfull
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impactful
to the level of their
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.
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that
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high
amoung
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amount
of salary usually are stable enough to provide
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facilities
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in the
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work places
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that can be received by their
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such
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as nutritious
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,
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, and private medical doctors.
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, all of that
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can be enjoyed for free by their staff.
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is one of the reasons that rich
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can
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easily
have access towards
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
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,
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unfortunate citizen usually works in a place with limited access to
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health
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the health
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facility,
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they
even
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forced to
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in
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high risk
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disease environment with only given average
amoung
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amount
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the company or office. Even though there is still a way that average
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keep their body healthy by consuming
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healthy
food
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from the local market where cheaper
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are
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provided. Yet the education to acknowledge
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healthier
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is vital. Rich
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usually have
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high level
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education
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of education
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that makes them able to digest
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information
easly
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easily
and check the article fact. The middle-low
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have
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the tendency to
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misunderstand
misunderstood
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health
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informations
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or believe in a story
that is
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not evidence-based.
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is another reason that can endanger
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their
the
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.
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, It is undeniable that wealthy
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have the
privilage
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privilege
compared to
people
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who do not have
large
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amount
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amounts
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of money that makes them easier to keep their body fit,
for
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the
health
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facilities
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that are provided by the company and the high level of knowledge in choosing the fact.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access to quality healthcare
  • Expedited treatment options
  • Cutting-edge medical technologies
  • Healthy diet and lifestyle
  • Organic and whole foods
  • Environmental factors
  • Cleaner neighborhoods
  • Financial stability
  • Health education
  • Preventative healthcare measures
  • Social determinants of health
  • Recreational facilities
  • Stress and mental health
  • Living conditions
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