it is easier for wealthy people to maintain good health than it is for people who do not have large amounts of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, there is a large discrepancy in
health
status between the upper class and middle-lower class
society
. Some
people
believed that it is harder
to
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people
who only have
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or small amount of money to stay healthy compared to
the
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rich
people
. I concur that a lot of efforts and conditions
that
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are needed to maintain
people
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health
status, and it is effortless to
upper class
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society
to maintain it.
People
that have a lot of money usually
work
in a nice
work
placce
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place
places
that
have
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good
facilities
that
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are impactfull
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impactfull
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impactful
to the level of their
health
.
Work places
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that
offers
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high
amoung
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amount
of salary usually are stable enough to provide
health
facilities
in the
work places
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that can be received by their
worker
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such
as nutritious
food
,
gym
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, and private medical doctors.
Moreover
, all of that
facilities
can be enjoyed for free by their staff.
This
is one of the reasons that rich
society
can
easyly
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easily
have access towards
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lifestyle
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.
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,
the
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unfortunate citizen usually works in a place with limited access to
health
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facility,
furthermore
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they
even
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forced to
work
in
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high risk
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disease environment with only given average
amoung
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amount
of salary
by
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the company or office. Even though there is still a way that average
people
keep their body healthy by consuming
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healthy
food
from the local market where cheaper
food
are
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provided. Yet the education to acknowledge
the
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healthier
food
is vital. Rich
people
usually have
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high level
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education
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that makes them able to digest
health
information
easly
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easily
and check the article fact. The middle-low
society
have
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the tendency to
missunderstood
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misunderstand
misunderstood
the
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health
informations
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or believe in a story
that is
not evidence-based.
This
is another reason that can endanger
theit
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their
the
health
.
To sum up
, It is undeniable that wealthy
people
have the
privilage
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privilege
compared to
people
who do not have
large
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amount
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of money that makes them easier to keep their body fit,
for
instance
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the
health
facilities
that are provided by the company and the high level of knowledge in choosing the fact.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access to quality healthcare
  • Expedited treatment options
  • Cutting-edge medical technologies
  • Healthy diet and lifestyle
  • Organic and whole foods
  • Environmental factors
  • Cleaner neighborhoods
  • Financial stability
  • Health education
  • Preventative healthcare measures
  • Social determinants of health
  • Recreational facilities
  • Stress and mental health
  • Living conditions
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