You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter introduce yourself say why you are interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs

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Dear Sir or Madam, First of all, let me introduce myself. My name is Jannaya and I study at Victoria
colleges
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. And I am writing
you
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referring the facility
of
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for
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sports,
for
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instance
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a
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basketball or tennis and
gym
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a gym
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. I am asking you about
this
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because my
college
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don't
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have
sport
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sports
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facilities.
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why I am
interesting
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to get to know how
become
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a member.
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, what other facilities
you
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have? Is there any swimming pool, changing rooms, shower room and lockers? And how much does
its
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it
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cost monthly? And what time
you
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open and close? Is there any special discount for students? I am very happy if you can give me
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more
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information about your
sport
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clubs because the place is near to my college. My address and phone number are below and you can ring me at
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and do appreciate
for
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your response as soon as possible. Thank you and regards Janaya
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