The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given flow chart provides information about the
salmon
Use synonyms
life
cycle, starting from small to large Use synonyms
fish
. Use synonyms
Overall
, commonly there are three processes in the Linking Words
life
of Use synonyms
fish
and 3 different habitats.
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According to
the figure, It can clearly be seen that a fry whose body size is about 3-8 cm is the first step. To avoid bigger creatures that are eager to prey on it, the tiny Linking Words
fish
live in a lower river but with fast flowing current and spends their Use synonyms
life
in the environment for 4 years approximately. Use synonyms
While
the fry grows over time, it becomes a medium size Linking Words
fish
and stronger to adapt to the wider Use synonyms
sea
. In Use synonyms
this
stage, the Linking Words
fish
called a smolt that has 12-15 cm in size gets ready to travel in the open Use synonyms
sea
and live in the Use synonyms
sea
for about 5 years and Use synonyms
subsequently
become an adult Linking Words
salmon
.
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Furthermore
, the adult Linking Words
salmon
is a mature cycle Use synonyms
life
of Use synonyms
salmon
which is the time to reproduce. When the breeding age comes, the couple Use synonyms
salmon
leave the open Use synonyms
sea
and search for a place Use synonyms
that is
safe to put eggs. They go to the upper river with slow-moving containing reeds and stones. They hide the eggs under reeds and among small stones and the eggs will hatch in the next 5-6 months. Linking Words
Finally
, the newborn Linking Words
salmon
start their Use synonyms
life
.Use synonyms
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, life, fish, sea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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