The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given flow chart provides information about the
salmon
life
cycle, starting from small to large fish
. Overall
, commonly there are three processes in the life
of fish
and 3 different habitats.
According to
the figure, It can clearly be seen that a fry whose body size is about 3-8 cm is the first step. To avoid bigger creatures that are eager to prey on it, the tiny fish
live in a lower river but with fast flowing current and spends their life
in the environment for 4 years approximately. While
the fry grows over time, it becomes a medium size fish
and stronger to adapt to the wider sea
. In this
stage, the fish
called a smolt that has 12-15 cm in size gets ready to travel in the open sea
and live in the sea
for about 5 years and subsequently
become an adult salmon
.
Furthermore
, the adult salmon
is a mature cycle life
of salmon
which is the time to reproduce. When the breeding age comes, the couple salmon
leave the open sea
and search for a place that is
safe to put eggs. They go to the upper river with slow-moving containing reeds and stones. They hide the eggs under reeds and among small stones and the eggs will hatch in the next 5-6 months. Finally
, the newborn salmon
start their life
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, life, fish, sea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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